[CSE] Relius Clover Critique and Self-Improvement Thread

[Axle_the_red]

and of course, obligatory thanks to zeth for the upload

How might I obtain said upload services? I know BBVlog used to do them, but they went on hold for a while...

I'd love some critique. I'm frustrated out of my mind trying to pick out what to do better/how to do it. @_@